Hi you have made a good start at your story but you need to check it before you publish it as I struggled to follow some of the story. It is also a little short of the 100 words it should be so perhaps next week you will be able to get near the 100 word total. Keep up the good work.
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Hi you have made a good start at your story but you need to check it before you publish it as I struggled to follow some of the story. It is also a little short of the 100 words it should be so perhaps next week you will be able to get near the 100 word total. Keep up the good work.